The Prophet

[rayheinrich]

Inserting old movie clichés into a poem, even when intended as
homage or oblong irony, is pretty lame dude.

Totally missed your reference, sorry.  If it's an old movie cliche,
it's not from any old movies I've seen.  Perhaps the idea of vision
as literal eyes, discarded on the floor, requires clarification.  
What movie is that from?  Something Texican?

If only one member of your audience experiences it as a cliché
it's not called a cliché anymore, it's called his problem.  *


*The first movies that came to mind were Eisenstein's
Battleship Potemkin, Hitchcock's The 39 Steps, Maya Deren's
Meshes of the Afternoon (though, technically, it's a mirror reflecting
eyes that gets crushed - but metaphor IS metaphor after all), etc.
(Buñuel/Dalí's Un Chien Andalou probably doesn't count as the eye
there is being cut open with a razor.) Of course it wasn't a cliché then,
that happened when schlocky horror movies, psychological thrillers, etc.
started using it and using it.