07-30-2015, 11:45 AM
Hi Leanne. There are two poems you wrote and posted here where I remember going "huh, say what?" There's something pretentious about this one. almost like an in-authentic brain fart for you (you are so talented that you can pull off sterling brain farts). There were two "line breaks" that I would have done differently (though perhaps you would have disagreed).
I remember when I first came on this site. Your "leopards a leaping" poem. I loved that one. So playfully sprite and intelligent. Then that sonnet you wrote...whew! One of the best (to me) that I've read on this site.
I wished I knew how to be a good critic. I'm always thinking how I would have done it. Me, me, me, me, me...
You're always fun to read. I read a lot on this site. Bad critic.
Sometimes I think I'd love to "tell you" what to write, and then see what you do.
Me. me, me again.
I remember when I first came on this site. Your "leopards a leaping" poem. I loved that one. So playfully sprite and intelligent. Then that sonnet you wrote...whew! One of the best (to me) that I've read on this site.
I wished I knew how to be a good critic. I'm always thinking how I would have done it. Me, me, me, me, me...
You're always fun to read. I read a lot on this site. Bad critic.
Sometimes I think I'd love to "tell you" what to write, and then see what you do.
Me. me, me again.
You can't hate me more than I hate myself. I win.
"When the spirit of justice eloped on the wings
Of a quivering vibrato's bittersweet sting."
"When the spirit of justice eloped on the wings
Of a quivering vibrato's bittersweet sting."