07-17-2015, 07:46 PM
(07-17-2015, 03:38 PM)Tiger the Lion Wrote: CohortThis is the perfect "getting to know you" moment. It could apply to so many things but the smoking is absolutely in the current mindset. Well done.
Ashamed and hesitant,
I told her I smoked.
Her face lit up.
I am up in the air on whether "I revealed that" might replace "I told her". I don't think you need it with your successful first line, I just love the sound of the word revealed.
I guess your simplicity is better, thanks for the read. Good title, too.
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