07-10-2015, 08:24 AM
(04-01-2015, 09:04 PM)Bananadon Wrote: Have you ever shaken hands with a killer,This poem.
And noticed from just their touch
That they've paid for all of their sins?
As living with guilt is far too much.
Have you ever shaken hands with a killer,
And felt the tide of their misery
Crash against the palm of your hand?
A life story in one moment of synergy.
Have you ever shaken hands with a killer,
And felt the sweat of their crimes?
When closer than any other,
You understand they've done their time.
Have you ever shaken hands with a killer?
Their grip, so tight, like love's grasp,
And their eyes pierce yours,
As if to say, how they long to correct their past.
Have you ever shaken hands with a killer?
Most have, but few recall,
For they are many in number, but still so rare to find,
They do so much to hide their evil.
Have you ever shaken hands with me?
If so I hope you know my dread,
For what I've done is inexcusable,
And all that I love, is dead.
I was blown away. The synergy line was excellent. The message seemed fairly direct at first, then the last stanza made me re read it again, and I felt the deeper meaning. The evil line could possibly be tweaked, I just feel like it's not a strong enough rhyme to fit in with the flow, but it can still work.
