07-10-2015, 04:41 AM
i.might.be.a.bit.sad,
Is "Feel free to tear it up!" part of the poem? It works if it is, doesn't if it's not. The tension between "free" and "sin" orients me. Otw, I'm lost, too.
Here's why: the words here can each be construed in several ways, so I'm left with one of those top-middle-bottom children's books where you can, you know, make the man in the sweatervest into the man in the jacket by flipping the middle panel.
That was a dumb analogy.
What I meant was there's too many permutations to consider and no apparent payoff. So, for instance, release can mean at least these four things: renew a contract for temporary possession, to let go of an object, to waive rights, and a relaxation of muscular or emotional tension. And the word "release" can be a verb or a noun.
That's fine, no problem, that's just the way English tends to be, *except* each definition as either a noun or a verb can be made to fit the poem. It'd be too laborious to give any comprehensive examples, but consider that "red" in the context here could be blood, dye, "read" by poetic homonym, or ink. All of those work with sin—taken in order, the sin of drawing or betraying blood, the sin of mislaundering red with white fabrics, the sin of reading a forbidden document, and the sin of signing a contract with an illegal or malicious purpose. And each of those meanings works with every construction of the title.
And that's amazing *except*, like I said, I don't see a payoff. If the poem were about permutations, maybe. If "Feel free to tear it up!" were part of the poem, maybe. As is, I can't find it.
Is "Feel free to tear it up!" part of the poem? It works if it is, doesn't if it's not. The tension between "free" and "sin" orients me. Otw, I'm lost, too.
Here's why: the words here can each be construed in several ways, so I'm left with one of those top-middle-bottom children's books where you can, you know, make the man in the sweatervest into the man in the jacket by flipping the middle panel.
That was a dumb analogy.
What I meant was there's too many permutations to consider and no apparent payoff. So, for instance, release can mean at least these four things: renew a contract for temporary possession, to let go of an object, to waive rights, and a relaxation of muscular or emotional tension. And the word "release" can be a verb or a noun.
That's fine, no problem, that's just the way English tends to be, *except* each definition as either a noun or a verb can be made to fit the poem. It'd be too laborious to give any comprehensive examples, but consider that "red" in the context here could be blood, dye, "read" by poetic homonym, or ink. All of those work with sin—taken in order, the sin of drawing or betraying blood, the sin of mislaundering red with white fabrics, the sin of reading a forbidden document, and the sin of signing a contract with an illegal or malicious purpose. And each of those meanings works with every construction of the title.
And that's amazing *except*, like I said, I don't see a payoff. If the poem were about permutations, maybe. If "Feel free to tear it up!" were part of the poem, maybe. As is, I can't find it.
A yak is normal.