Patriotic Colors

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First off- when I clicked on this thread, I noticed the all-caps right away. As I read the poem, I would have to say the emphasis on these words are a little sarcastic in nature especially as you mentioned that it was for PTSD sufferers and Independence Day. The spirit of this poem I really like- I think you could clean it up to be more precise and less wordy, but overall it's good. I hope I didn't go overboard with the comments as I know this is the Novice section.

Here, in THE LAND OF THE BRAVE,
they curl up in rooms, waiting for the some description of the rooms here would be nice
PATRIOTIC DISPLAY
to stop
reminding
them I like the separation of words here. It makes for a starker read, which I think fits in well with what you're trying to say.
of the things they did for
THE LAND OF THE FREE
and people say that they
DEFENDED OUR FREEDOM freedom sounds a bit overused right now as "the land of the free" was just used- liberty? rights?
but someone, please, explain why,
exactly,
such a big sacrifice was required for… "big" is unnecessary here, I think.
what? What had the fight even been
about?
And the
RED WHITE AND BLUE
Explode in the air,
but all she can think about is the
RED WHITE AND BLUE
that lit up the ceiling of their bedroom that night that he the night that he
didn’t come home
from the bright, all-American what do you mean to say by "all-American"? Does just "American" work?
bridge.