Where is my Bird?

[billy]

what are the seas that meet at the firth?

at first read it feels very poetic but on closer look it's missing some depth.

the
'and wallow me in' line really held me up.

try it with some meter. [you can find out about meter in a lot of the stickies we have on the site]
i often find that poems with brevity can often be improved with even more brevity.


I took a pigment of shell
And looked for a dead Essence;

i love the above two lines but the next line deflates any good they carry.

Where is my Bird?
It flew away, along the firth,
to where listless seas meet