From your local Gestapo

[Erthona]

I liked your first two stanzas which were in iambic trimeter. Dropping it in S3 was disrupting to the reading. The topic in this presentation was simplistic/black and white thinking. It set up the them "government" and the we "not the government" against each each other. It characterized the government as the evil bully and the "we" as the innocent victim. Only nominal experience of life teaches us that situation are never so straightforward, no matter how they might appear. Setting on side against the other is a tactic often used in rhetoric to fire up the crowd, but much less effective and obvious when there is no speaker to pound the podium, as it were. Maybe this might suffice for someone naive enough, who only is looking for an excuse to feel self-righteous anger. Believe me, if anyone would have cause to have an ax to grind against the police it would be me, as I was basically robbed by them because someone who was staying at my house was accused of committing a crime. They decided it warranted taking everything that might have pawn shop value. They took the video camera, but left the video tape, TV's, music equipment, and so on. When I went to reclaim it nearly two years later after the trial was completed, I only got less than a third of it back, a lot of that was broken. So if this were going to appeal to someone, it should appeal to me.

Best,

Dale