06-06-2015, 01:02 PM
Hello three name girl, welcome to the site.
Aha, the "Vagina Monologues" via menstruation.
The thing that really jumped out and confused me was the use of the word "barren". Although I understand it can have a meaning that is something akin to fallow, that is not the general connotation, nor the one that came to mind for me. Initially this caused me confusion as I took it to mean incapable of producing. Also it appeared the character was blaming her period for not having had sex for four months. However a painful period does not mean painful sex. Certainly if one was talking about large cysts (ovarian cysts) these can make sex painful all the time, but there was nothing to indicate that this was a condition of this character. So while I enjoyed the raging, it seemed somewhat unfounded. It could be she is the victim of a massive hormonal dump and this is what is making her somewhat hyperbolic in her language usage and irrational in the focus of her hate. This is quite understandable given the circumstances, however if such is true, it cannot be left unsaid, so in some subtle way, mention it; decent poems can be ruined by the lack of necessary contextual background. There are the means of a good poem here.
Best,
Dale
Aha, the "Vagina Monologues" via menstruation.
The thing that really jumped out and confused me was the use of the word "barren". Although I understand it can have a meaning that is something akin to fallow, that is not the general connotation, nor the one that came to mind for me. Initially this caused me confusion as I took it to mean incapable of producing. Also it appeared the character was blaming her period for not having had sex for four months. However a painful period does not mean painful sex. Certainly if one was talking about large cysts (ovarian cysts) these can make sex painful all the time, but there was nothing to indicate that this was a condition of this character. So while I enjoyed the raging, it seemed somewhat unfounded. It could be she is the victim of a massive hormonal dump and this is what is making her somewhat hyperbolic in her language usage and irrational in the focus of her hate. This is quite understandable given the circumstances, however if such is true, it cannot be left unsaid, so in some subtle way, mention it; decent poems can be ruined by the lack of necessary contextual background. There are the means of a good poem here.
Best,
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.