Endometriosis

[Todd]

Hello staciamberdawn, quite a first offering. Welcome to the site! 

I will do my best to give you feedback. I found this quite funny. It would make a great spoken piece, and that's sort of how I'm going to approach it. Here are some comments for you. 

Oh, hello period. --As a first line I like the full stop of the period after the "period".
We meet again.
You woke me in the middle of the night this time.--You probably don't need this time. Though that's a very slight cut.
URGENT! EMERGENCY! DISASTER ALERT!--This might be a good place to consider inserting an image. I see the old lost in space robot flailing its vacuum arms sounding the alarm (but that's just me). It's a good sequence as you have it, but imagery might make it stronger and more memorable. 
The way you knock painfully loud on my uterus, it’s all terribly unnecessary you know.
But I see you’re right on time.--Maybe foreshadow a little more emotional pain into this line.

I forgot your familiar sense of special pain.
The way you make your presence known makes my stomach churn.--condense it will make ice cream line pop more.
The weight of your burden makes or my back ache.
I have no other choice; I must drown myself in double chocolate, caramel chip, marshmallow peanut butter swirl ice-cream.--excellent expansive line with a great follow up line.
It’s tradition.

What I hate the most about your uninvited visits, Period, is not that you dress me like a slob.--Consider condensing again without so much lead up.
Or even that you force me to tears over the last slice of pizza.--perhaps first and last
It has to be the painful reminder that I have not had sex for yet another month.
I believe that makes four and counting.--I'm already stretching the amount of feedback I should be giving you in novice (a testament to how much I like your treatment of this). Condense again here.

Mother Nature must have a cruel sense of humor sending you to torture and taunt me.
Never letting me forget that
I Am Barren.

Don’t you see that my womb could be full of love and life and joy?
That I am capable of so much more!
That my body could grow such a magnificent life!
Can’t you just see my womb has so much potential?

But sadly you inhabit it instead.
An ironic projection of my messy, painful life.
You know, I think I’m just going to curl up in bed until you are gone.
This unfruitful uterus is not much in the mood for houseguests.

When you’re done wreaking havoc, please just clean up after yourself and lock the door.
And make sure you leave a little trail of blood
In my tiny pink panties
So I don’t forget you,
Period. --perfect ending and it works with the one word line full stop.                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                               

I stopped giving comments because of novice and because it's more of the same. I like what you're doing, but I think the poem would be stronger if you pared out a lot of the extra flourishes. You would still keep your voice and the humor.

I hope some of that helps.

Best,

Todd