06-06-2015, 12:46 AM
I really enjoyed this. I don't have much negative to say. I will say I am new so don't take my advice too seriously.
I loved the rhythm and beat of the poem, I felt reading it was easy. It felt like reading music.
However, I would be curious to know what you were referring to as I was waiting at the end for some sort of reveal.
One last note. The line "They do so much to hide their evil." Something really grabbed me there. Almost like that could be its own poem. Trying to hone in on what I am thinking but its tough, just noticed that line really got me thinking
I loved the rhythm and beat of the poem, I felt reading it was easy. It felt like reading music.
However, I would be curious to know what you were referring to as I was waiting at the end for some sort of reveal.
One last note. The line "They do so much to hide their evil." Something really grabbed me there. Almost like that could be its own poem. Trying to hone in on what I am thinking but its tough, just noticed that line really got me thinking
