Bus Routes As Origami

[Animal Riots Activist]

thanks government

i.e. Thanks, Obama.

In a poem like this, the only thing there is is nitpicking. So my nitpicks:

Bus Routes As Origami

infinite folds trace -I'm not sure what you're getting at here with infinite folds. Even though the poem is language oriented, it still seems the other images are tied together, but this one seems on its own. I would say rework it, or more clearly tie in what you're trying to say w/ the infinite folds part w/ more language

patchwork
                  the crease

synapse across a page -awesome. awesome. awesome.
brings corners together

inner city wind scars
Euclidian topography Hey, Map Man, could you send me a map of the NYC bus lines so that I can print them on a hypersphere? I just find that so much more convenient.
darkest shining towers-tweak this guy, it's too parallel w/ metal night bench. Mainly in the dark v night thing.

why not carpet streets -a question i find myself asking all too often...
usher eternal, find seat
when lights down
icy cold velvet -a bit of redundancy here, i would say tailor the adj "cold" into something less redundant
metal night bench I said to tweak the other one, because I like this one a lot better; this one's very strong.

thanks government tie
light ways with fire line -fire line. yes.
charred to other side
crease scars collective -I like that you're bringing crease back in here.
waiting frozen at sign
for flame to burn
downtown crease fold
origami rock and steel -there's a bit of a jump in this last line. Let me sit w/ it to tell you what I think, I just don't know yet.

Really nice work.