06-04-2015, 04:42 PM
Oh my god..
"They do so much to hide their evil."
I know this all too well. If this is a story.. just a story. Then you are a brilliant story teller. But, if you really did kill someone you love.
There are parts of the poem that are shaky.
They do so much to hide their evil is a scary line because it implies you could be hiding your evil with this poem. It is the one line that shatters the other lines vulnerable truth-like credibility.
A poem of a psychopath, bringing you in.. and then carefully leaving a crumb.. a line of partial honesty. A line of manipulation.
Well done.
Very interesting. I hope you are.. just a really good story teller.
"They do so much to hide their evil."
I know this all too well. If this is a story.. just a story. Then you are a brilliant story teller. But, if you really did kill someone you love.
There are parts of the poem that are shaky.
They do so much to hide their evil is a scary line because it implies you could be hiding your evil with this poem. It is the one line that shatters the other lines vulnerable truth-like credibility.
A poem of a psychopath, bringing you in.. and then carefully leaving a crumb.. a line of partial honesty. A line of manipulation.
Well done.
Very interesting. I hope you are.. just a really good story teller.