Application

[buildthestars]

completely newbiieee, totally open to all the criticism

You start with a crowd, then
Reduce to a group. awkward flow and kind of a weak start
Then it’s left with you and him. For them,
To pick and choose. still awkward, I think you could use better wordplay here

“Friends” who left with cheer and shouts,
Waving that paper (at times email), jumping up and down, don't like these two lines at all
They dance their joy out
Sing happiness out loud
Even the air is sweet
Nothing could stop them now. doesn't have any punch to it

But you,
Still in that dark corner,
Tie yourself to the chair.
You ripped your chest open,
Carve out your bowls and heart. bowels*
With whatever other gestures needed,
To outsell yourself
Beg them that you’re special, "beg them that you're special" isn't really working for me here
Creative,
Smart, I would instead use a period after smart and just break to the next stanza without the ellipses. also, liked this stanza, it stuck out the most to me. you could probably use stronger imagery, but it's a good start
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And many other things that are left,
As much as your long-drained dignity
Starting from when to yourself you secretly vow,
When seeing “the application is open now”. these two lines don't really flow

good subject to write about. I think you have the opportunity here to use a lot of fun wordplay & really engage the reader with imagery and a syntax with a good beat to it.

no need to capitalize the first letter of every line.

third stanza was the strongest. good flow, just needs a bit of editing.

nice work and I hope to see more from you.