Senior Year, Second Revision

[reppindetroit]

I think you your description is on point, however this is most of the substance of the poem--description. It seems merely a narrative for most of the parts. The last stanza is something you should try to emulate throughout the rest of the poem, because it truly captures the significance, the reason why the speaker is, well, speaking.

That being said, you have a lot of potential in this. Keep going!