Poetry in Real Time Pt 3

[Tiger the Lion]

Hi Paul,

I like the 'matter of fact' first line which says so much more than its straight forward reading. I kind of want it to be "one is later than nine" just so it seems less logical, if that makes sense, although 'twelve' does sound better.

Did you consider "any friend" for line 2. When reading it the way it is now with 'a friend' I feel as though it is more leaning towards implying that the friends that you can call late at night are 'better' friends, although I'm sure this isn't your intention. Whereas I feel that "any friend" changes it slightly and reinforces the notion of different worlds that the first line alludes to, that's just the feeling I get from reading it.

I had to google who Jimmy Fallon was. Either it's because I'm British or I'm just not cool... Or both.

Cheers for the read,

Mark

Thanks Mark. Ya, line 2 might be better with "any". I think "a" is a little more reflective of the narrator simply realizing they were wrong about the first thought. ( but I get that it's a bit of a hiccup)
Appreciate your thoughts as always.