05-09-2015, 12:43 PM
you're just mommy with balls 
on a serious note, i like it though i think in an odd place it's a bit wordy.
the 2nd line i put it back for me would work better.
not sure the the 1st line of the 2nd adds anything.
i think with a poem such as this, brevity is the name of the game.
on a serious note, i like it though i think in an odd place it's a bit wordy.
the 2nd line i put it back for me would work better.
not sure the the 1st line of the 2nd adds anything.
i think with a poem such as this, brevity is the name of the game.