While you're on the other side of the world to me

[Lloyd E Dixon]

While you're on the other side of the world to me,this sounds like an emotional distance, don't know if that's what you're going for, maybe shorten this line, take out while, if you want to maintain the rhyme pattern
Everything will change, this side of the sea.
The howling wind will pass, the thick fog will go;a good representation of lonelyness here
You'll hear my truth, you'll see my soul.

The feeling of electricity when I hold your hand,this line could be shortened also
As if lighting had struck twice where I stand,
Shoots up my arm and blows through my mind;
Like a shockwave, your touch ripples through my insides.and this line , you could lose like, and replace "insides" with something that flows more

And if the world was forever eclipsed,
By the magic that passes between our lips,
I couldn't care for what they all might say;
For our love would shine brighter than the light of any day.

Whether washed up on some tepid tide,
Or lost in a maze, you'll forever be my guide.try to keep this on a ocean or beach topic that could still refer to confusion and guidence
You show me life, where all seems dead;
You make my life, I love you, Beth.