04-06-2015, 05:36 AM
I really like both versions. the revised one is definitely easier to read, and i like that. I like the addition of the word "winks" it really adds more images in my head. I would love to say that i absolutely love the newest version, but I MISS THE GIRLS THOUGHTS! I really fell in love with her imagined thoughts, and i would like to see them in the revised version. Maybe not in parentheses if its hard to work with, as i can imagine, but i personally did not find them hard to read. Thanks for this poem!
Sometimes I feel like writing poetry and sometimes I watch Netflix. No judging.