Yesterday, Our Old School Burnt Down

[SaddestStates]

Yesterday, I thought of her
And the lifeless rock it woke and heard
And every line and every word
was: “I once knew her”.

But we never read in text-books
how well we’d leave behind,
the silent promises we spoke blind
When we were laughing hard and grasping hands
to dance with crowds to decent bands.
Back then I’d use a phone to talk to God
and she could flash the firing squad.

Today she’s inches from my feet.
I should run back years and we'd meet
again, but this time I’d be different,
so I’d never write about time spent
thinking of just how we knew each other.

Yesterday, I thought of her.
And the weeping willow moved with thought. <-----
And the flightless bird it sang the thought. <----
And the fish looked through the water-sky
To say to the sun: “I knew her”.

Most of everything that has been covered already. I think the main thing needed is punctuation in parts stated above, and that will go far with this really thought out and well rounded poems. It's even something I have trouble doing in my poems, and I am trying to work on it to get it correct all the time The subtle undertone of the feelings in this poem are outstanding. My real stand out part is thought and thought at the end, along with the fact the willow thought. maybe a better imagery could be placed there. But great work, and cant wait to read the edited version!