trash man

[SaddestStates]

While I appeciate the commentary and criticism on the struggles of the working class, I feel your poem lacks clarity, doesn't quite say enough to really stand out.

"Hi.
Yes, trash man?"

It's a little confusing that you begin the poem as a conversation with the trash man, or perhaps the 'Hi' was intended for the audience, but then continue only with commentary. I would refer back to the conversational aspect at least once in the verses.

I really liked the use of this interaction, and I could be shooting off in the wrong direction, the lowly trash man says hi to the people, and since he is lowly, they reply back, Yes, trash man? because of his job, and his status in life. Also like they are bugging him.

There's very few words in this, but that leaves it open to a lot of interpretation to the reader. But maybe a bit more context, to reign it in a little bit would be better, instead of letting it go wide open. Overall I enjoyed this.