Yesterday, Our Old School Burnt Down

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Yesterday, I thought of her
And the lifeless rock it woke and heard
And every line and every word
was: “I once knew her”. this line needs 1 more syllable

But we never read in text-books
how well we’d leave behind,
the silent promises we spoke blind this does not work with the previous line. "spoke blind" needs to be rewritten
When we were laughing hard and grasping hands
to dance with crowds to decent bands. can you choose a word besides decent? it just sounds so lame. or maybe use the space to describe something besides the bands
Back then I’d use a phone to talk to God
and she could flash the firing squad. i think you can come up with a better word than 'could' here.

Today she’s inches from my feet.
I should run back years and we'd meet this line needs to be reworked to match the previous
again, but this time I’d be different,
so I’d never write about time spent
thinking of just how we knew each other.

Yesterday, I thought of her.
And the weeping willow moved with thought.
And the flightless bird it sang the thought.
And the fish looked through the water-sky
To say to the sun: “I knew her”.

I made some notes. I had more to say but didn't want to overwhelm you with critiques.