County Fair

[71degrees]

Hi 71 - I really like the first two stanzas - your imagery is strong, and it takes me into the scene beautifully; although my memories are different, it's the same county fair. I feel that your last stanza lets them down - in fact, is it needed? It feels like a postscript to me.

"…in fact, is it needed?" Maybe not Although, the last image, I like. Thinking.

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Hey 71. I really love this. I have only one issue. The second part of the refrain too often trips me up when I read it aloud. At first I thought the problem was the 2 uses of the word "for" --- "for them for" doesn't roll off the tongue easily for me, and even when it does it sounds overly percussive for the mood. I thought that a comma after each instance of "write a poem for them" might be a remedy. But looking at it further I wonder if you need "for they are" at all. It feels like an implied colon, like you are about to list your reasons. To my ear, each stanza reads stronger without it. Of course that's just my ear, I could be tone deaf. Just wanted to give you something to think about.
Wonderful read. Thanks for sharing,
Paul

Thank you for responding, Paul. (edit: "…for they are…") Thinking about this.