NICU, For Dominic Edit #2.1

[ellajam]

^^^if you'll go back to what I stated, you'll see I said I love the volta (or turn) ---not that there wasn't one.

so neeners.

I know, but I thought you meant the change in tone of the couplet. It was you asking someone else Where's the volta? that made me re-examine this in that light.

So thank you, mel.

Rhyming couplets have a natural tendency to sound cutesy but, yah, I think yours isn't really treading any new ground and it is doing so in a very generic way.

Agreed. Go read my snow sonnet, good for a laugh.