If I Awake to Flames After I Die

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If I Awake to Flames After I Die

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01-20-2015, 06:20 AM

(01-20-2015, 06:08 AM)charlie142 Wrote: i liked this, i really like the idea! Perhaps some of the rhymes could be tweaked, along with some of the rhythm, and personally I would rather it were split into separate stanzas. But I really liked this poem

Please be more specific in the workshops. Which rhymes could be tweaked and why? Where is the "rhythm" off? Please leave critiques that can help the poet improve.

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If I Awake to Flames After I Die - by alatos - 01-30-2014, 01:41 AM

RE: If I Awake to Flames After I Die - by Blake - 01-30-2014, 02:35 AM

RE: If I Awake to Flames After I Die - by gslegrá - 01-31-2014, 10:48 PM

RE: If I Awake to Flames After I Die - by LickinLyrics - 02-02-2014, 07:59 PM

RE: If I Awake to Flames After I Die - by Brian - 07-20-2014, 01:22 PM

RE: If I Awake to Flames After I Die - by KROD - 07-21-2014, 09:16 AM

RE: If I Awake to Flames After I Die - by billy - 07-23-2014, 06:31 PM

RE: If I Awake to Flames After I Die - by SomeRandom - 08-04-2014, 02:23 PM

RE: If I Awake to Flames After I Die - by L Oquence - 08-13-2014, 06:12 AM

RE: If I Awake to Flames After I Die - by bwasroy - 08-16-2014, 07:30 AM

RE: If I Awake to Flames After I Die - by konstantin27 - 08-16-2014, 10:19 PM

RE: If I Awake to Flames After I Die - by KerouacJack - 08-18-2014, 07:41 AM

RE: If I Awake to Flames After I Die - by ellajam - 09-09-2014, 11:11 AM

RE: If I Awake to Flames After I Die - by Pyxx - 09-12-2014, 12:59 PM

RE: If I Awake to Flames After I Die - by Mwaba don - 09-20-2014, 08:03 PM

RE: If I Awake to Flames After I Die - by Sa - 01-19-2015, 07:05 AM

RE: If I Awake to Flames After I Die - by Nahtaivel616 - 01-21-2015, 04:20 PM

RE: If I Awake to Flames After I Die - by bena - 01-24-2015, 09:20 PM

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