4 Lines Of A Storm

[QDeathstar]

I like this poem, the Brontes reference is there for the one eye like the eye of a hurricane, the monster or cyclops being the storm, maybe that is a bit clunky.


I love the "egg-yolk light drops through the sky" line, and I think it describes light pouring down from a hurricanes eye, through the mist, watery, like the clear part of the egg yolk.

It just needs one more line to anchor it, I think.