Matilda died today
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(12-16-2014, 04:58 AM)Leah S. Wrote:  This is a good poem already. I decline to give you a detailed critique because I'm so moved. Later maybe. I do want to know her name sooner in the poem, I think it should be in the first line, really. There are a few places where I can't quite get the sense, but I believe they will be easy to fix. I looked up tangihanga because of this poem. Thank you.
Thanks for your read and comments. Her name is in the title of the poem.
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Matilda died today - by just mercedes - 12-13-2014, 05:35 AM
RE: Matilda died today - by tectak - 12-13-2014, 05:45 AM
RE: Matilda died today - by Leanne - 12-13-2014, 05:57 AM
RE: Matilda died today - by just mercedes - 12-13-2014, 06:26 AM
RE: Matilda died today - by Leanne - 12-13-2014, 06:38 AM
RE: Matilda died today - by just mercedes - 12-13-2014, 06:49 AM
RE: Matilda died today - by crow - 12-14-2014, 11:43 AM
RE: Matilda died today - by Leah S. - 12-16-2014, 04:58 AM
RE: Matilda died today - by just mercedes - 12-16-2014, 05:28 AM
RE: Matilda died today - by Leah S. - 12-21-2014, 04:15 AM
RE: Matilda died today - by Leanne - 12-16-2014, 07:29 AM
RE: Matilda died today - by just mercedes - 12-16-2014, 09:36 AM
RE: Matilda died today - by StanleyZ - 12-28-2014, 04:44 PM



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