Drifting Away

[Dymun Fengshui]

Hi all,

Here's a poem I just created that depicts how I've been feeling about life lately. It's definitely a melancholy piece, so apologies if anyone feels depressed after reading it. It encapsulates some things that have happened in my family over the past year, as well as my ongoing challenge of figuring out my calling in life. Anyway, please critique as you like. Thanks for reading:

Drifting

So many disparate pieces
Once a part of a beautiful puzzle
Floating further and further away
Each in their own tormented orbits
Memories of a past that seems cruelly happy "Memories of a cruel past seem so happy
Drifting further away I don't like this line after already saying it just two before
Objects in mirror are farther than they appear
Nurturing new bonds is my medication
Without these, life would be meaningless
And yet, the pain still lingers
The memories of warmth and joy
A familial bond seemingly untouchable
Broken, shattered, flushed away
Never to return, never to breathe again
Drifting further away I don't like this concept I think maybe you should connect the drifting theme at the beginning and end rather than throughout
Feelings of being trapped in chains
The weight is unforgiving
What once seemed so clear has rendered itself hazy
A blindness of the future, a distaste of the present
Like a useless compass, whizzing around in circles
Never to land on one direction
Always searching for the true answer
A cosmic exploration of life's meanings, pains, and more
Forever drifting, further and further away