Tryst

[azure]

The slag adjusted her bodice in front of the mirror A slight issue with the use of the word slag. Seems out of place with its use here.
at his holiday home in the country side;
raindrops swelled and rolled I liked the simplistic, yet effective use of concise descriptive language.
down the mud wall. A clump of wildflowers good enjambment here, I think you should replace the word 'clump', for it does nothing to the image of wildflowers wilting.
wilted, and left behind a muddied remainder
of the monsoon and his warm breath. Solid enough ending.

This piece was solid, albeit a little dull and commercial for my taste. I don't mean to be harsh but it read like every other poem of quality on this site and beyond. It did impact me though, more so because I was listening to music that really suited the piece while reading. Other than that, while some of the word choices were a bit off, the poem's validity of expression was a sealed deal for me. Looking forward to more from you.

Azure