The Hungry General

[vagabond]

A poem I wrote some time ago in the style of Kipling's Barrack-Room Ballads and inspired by Sassoon's 'The General'. Again , any comments are welcomed

The Hungry General

'E readies us for battle
'E's made us fit an' lean
So we can raise the standard 'igh
For Country, God and Queen

'E marches us to battle
'E says we're like 'is sons
But once the shells begin to fly
'E's nowhere near the guns

'E sends us into battle     
'E's yet to 'ave 'is fill
So we must go on fighting 'til
We've paid 'is butcher's bill

this one can be read fluently. Have no changes for any better to offer besides I´d also fill in the missing H´s. 
Very clear message. Somehow I see soldiers singing this one like an ironical battle song as they part to the front.
and now i will go to youtube and listen to dylan´s masters of war