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In the Night
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11-10-2014, 12:10 PM
I really enjoyed this poem, except for the last line. This line seems out of the blue and the poem would be much better if you just cut this last line I think. I also think that it seems like you've worked the second stanza a lot more and in comparison the first stanza seems wordy.
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In the Night - by Gestalt222 - 04-23-2014, 07:33 AM
RE: In the Night - by rowens - 04-23-2014, 07:56 AM
RE: In the Night - by RiverNotch - 04-27-2014, 08:11 PM
RE: In the Night - by Gestalt222 - 04-30-2014, 01:12 AM
RE: In the Night - by ralex003 - 04-28-2014, 12:42 AM
RE: In the Night - by zahrakh - 09-09-2014, 08:10 PM
RE: In the Night - by Mwaba don - 09-11-2014, 07:34 AM
RE: In the Night - by Lysander Gray - 10-04-2014, 01:21 PM
RE: In the Night - by billy - 10-04-2014, 04:24 PM
RE: In the Night - by Quotidia - 10-05-2014, 04:41 PM
RE: In the Night - by noname - 11-10-2014, 12:10 PM
RE: In the Night - by azure - 11-13-2014, 11:46 PM
RE: In the Night - by paranoid marvin - 11-14-2014, 05:50 AM
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