New to haiku

New to haiku

billy Offline

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11-08-2014, 03:55 PM

a suggestion would be [traffic parts] as it's normal not to use run on sentences in the haiku
you culd also lose [a single] i like the concept and intent of the poem well done.

(11-08-2014, 07:09 AM)donbouquet Wrote: a haiku attempt:

cracked cement
a single wildflower
parts the traffic

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New to haiku - by donbouquet - 11-08-2014, 07:09 AM

RE: New to haiku - by SimikPK - 11-08-2014, 08:19 AM

RE: New to haiku - by just mercedes - 11-08-2014, 08:20 AM

RE: New to haiku - by donbouquet - 11-08-2014, 08:48 AM

RE: New to haiku - by billy - 11-08-2014, 03:55 PM

RE: New to haiku - by srijantje - 11-08-2014, 03:59 PM

RE: New to haiku - by donbouquet - 11-08-2014, 10:31 PM

RE: New to haiku - by bena - 11-10-2014, 11:54 PM

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