11-07-2014, 04:35 PM
(11-05-2014, 02:56 PM)Leanne Wrote: Thank you for your comment. Yes, I'm aware hemlock is a poison -- hence the title, which is an allusion to the last words of Socrates. The second stanza will probably make no sense if you haven't read The Republic -- again, Socrates via Plato. It's the allegory of the cave -- ignorant folk who believe themselves enlightened, watching shadows on the wall of their cave and believing that they are seeing the whole world. It's worth a read.
I'm afraid I've read it several times and, with a careful editor's eye -- aware that people don't live in my head -- I still feel there are sufficient keys.
mmmm yummy yummy allegory. I probably should repost mine, it has all that inside-my-own-head crazy person feel.
Yours is fanatically superior. There is one sentence that bothers me (Gramma speakin):
You follow fire
and soot its crackling, shadow
strings upon the wall.
I know you are using soot as a verb, but it took me several times reading to figure that out. Perhaps I was being ignorant....it's been known to happen.
mel.
