11-05-2014, 06:16 PM
(11-04-2014, 12:07 PM)Tiger the Lion Wrote: Poles
Sorry about the state of the igloo; Wouldn´t "Sorry about the igloo" be enough? It works well this way, but the "state" somehow disturbs me.
it's been a polar bear of a day As Requiem said, nicely done here.
and I am cold.
I've managed to scrape
blubber to burn through the night
if we can find a spark. The story ain't over, right? Nice ending, pointing to the not-yet unresolved conflict.
Nice poem, I like especially the contrast between mess in the igloo and yet sucessful blubber-scraping, and blubber-having and the need/challenge - to find the spark.
Thistles.

