The Bluffs

[billy]

i like the poem, it just feels a bit wordy in places. the last two lines didn't work for me though as it felt like they were rushed in order to end the poem.

Erosion’s cracked away the cliffs [erosion] would work better without ['s]
we trampled without care,
our paths have vanished in the shifts no need for [have] a comma would do just as well
since I last wandered there.
 
The homes that lined the bay have broke,
stuck shattered in the sand;
and kids and dogs no longer poke i like the enjambment here, the unexpected pause allows for a little ambiguity before the next line makes clear. [no need for the first and]
their noses where we ran. no need for [their]
 
Our jungle gym had monkey bars
for drinking by the lake,
where bad ass teen’s would shirk the stars
to watch the girls bums shake.
 
Those bluffs were home, not long ago,
to me and my first friends,
perhaps it’s better not to know
that even memories end.