Virginea Wolfed-'65 Revisited

[tectak]

Virginea's soul is crammed in to her eyes;
a woman-child not born until tomorrow.
She cries for all the things she is denied
and like a babe she mouths and sucks and swallows
everything that’s proffered in love’s  name.
Her lust is for the new and for the wild;
the craziness of searching for the same
but hoping that by playing the defiled,
the odds will favour her in this long game.
Hear how she moans and how she wails her joy;
a different cry for lovers with no names.
They leave her like an easter Christmas toy,
as I will, too, without remorse or sorrow;
she's mine today...she's anyone’s tomorrow.

tectak '65 then 2014

By popular request. Oh shit, I almost wroted a sonnet

I feel bad for Virginea. She is only looking for what everyone is, but she is so obsessed she never stopped to think about the difference between love and lust. There is a great theme here, especially in the speakers voice, because he(/she o.o) is the one taking advantage of the naive woman-child... Honestly that line kind of trips me up. What do you mean by "not born until tomorrow"? I took it to mean she may as well have been born yesterday. Maybe it's a cultural difference in diction... Either way I like how it alludes to the imagery of a child who needs affection to survive, not to mention the implicit sexual spin on that symbol. She is playing the part of an innocent whore... But at least it is to the benefit of the cynical speaker! I'm interested on your choice to use semi-colons where you did. I know I should be critiquing you in this thread, but I would do more to learn from you rather than leave a pseudo comment.

Hi stanley,
You got the full sense of this. The stumble ( I take responsibility) on "...not born until tomorrow" is a metaphorical/allusory phrase which roots in the common phrase "..doesn't know she's born". That is to say she will not know what she has done until much later in life.
Semicolons, indeed almost all the pause-punctuators, are dual purpose. Call a comma a count of one (depending upon your speed of delivery), then a semicolon is two, a colon three and a full stop as the dramatic intent requires. Only a fullstop ENDS a sentence requiring a capital letter on the next start word.
Apart from this somewhat contrived use, these squiggly marks, excluding the fullstop, also permit "linkages"between subjects,objects, concepts,phrasing, listed items. The thing worth remembering is that --counter-intuitively-- commas, semicolons snd colons keep things TOGETHER...not apart; that is how I use them.
Best and thanks,
tectak