10-23-2014, 09:03 PM
Thanks, fellas. I guess my defence of the use of wince is that the whole scene is a little over the top and deserving of extreme reactions. Perhaps.
The poem isn't meant to be in the past tense, Billy, so drink should be OK.
Tectak - yeah, you're right, it isn't really a sentence, but still, I think it works within this poem. I don't see your point about vedge-tah-bles. Oh, maybe I do. You're saying vegetables is spoken as 4 syllables? This isn't a posh restaurant.
The poem isn't meant to be in the past tense, Billy, so drink should be OK.
Tectak - yeah, you're right, it isn't really a sentence, but still, I think it works within this poem. I don't see your point about vedge-tah-bles. Oh, maybe I do. You're saying vegetables is spoken as 4 syllables? This isn't a posh restaurant.
Before criticising a person try walking a mile in their shoes. Then when you do criticise that person, you are a mile away.... and you have their shoes.