Tryst

[billy]

i think you could flesh the poem out a little more just to give it a bit more depth. thanks for the read.

you only need to highlight the block of writing to change the format

tryst seems very obvious and could do with something that shows us more than the poem does in the way it adds to the thing

The slag adjusted her bodice in front of the mirror i'd suggest moving [in the mirror] to the next line in order to make the first line draw the reader in, we like to read about slags but not one's in front of mirrors. ending on slags leaves it open ended. you could consider losing [in the mirror] altogether and allow the reader to use their own imagination you could perhaps use a simile to show how she adjusted the bodice
at his holiday home in the country side;
raindrops swelled and rolled
down the mud wall. A clump of wildflowers i'd suggest losing the period and uncapping the [A] and let the imagination see more than the obvious
wilted, and left behind a muddied remainder
of the monsoon and his warm breath.