Tryst

[cjchaffin]

i like how the edit is shaping up. 
and i actually enjoy the "raindrops swelled and rolled" line, 
in my mind it creates a very solid image. i have a couple of suggestions:

The Slag's Tryst

She adjusted her bodice in front of the mirror
at his cottage in the country side. <--countryside, one word
Raindrops swelled and rolled
down the mud wall. A clump of wildflowers
wilted, and left behind a muddied remainder <--i don't like "muddied" here. maybe a different descriptor? something like "sullied" or similar? and "remainder" feels too technical here as well, maybe "remnant" or something similar..."muddied remainder" just feels awkward to me when i read it aloud
from the monsoon of his warm breath. <--great closing line