Palaver

[Tamara]

i like this a lot, others may not
with the font; i think if you highlight it all then click on font you won't have to do it with every line. as it is it's hard to separate the wheat from the code.

okay the poem; it's very mallow very extended vignette. it captures a mundane moment in an original way and draws the reader in. i loved the soft ending of the poem and was reminded of other things with it instead of being left flat. just  a couple of nits to give it a bit more brevity. thanks for the read.

I was sitting in this quaint tea stall, would sat work better?No Billy. It most certainly would not Best, tectak
tinned roof noisy in the January breeze—
a few wooden benches, kettle boiling
in the corner with the brew
and the rising flavor of ginger. i like the smell of this line it was the [rising] that lifted it to an image
The tea boy comes
with tea in an old glass,
a layer of froth on the top.
I sip watching the Mexican Lilac tree,
its branches spread out like the legs of the spider. would legs of [a] spider; work better?
A group of Japanese tourists come in.
One sits next to me and looks at the ground
carpeted with pink petals. He looks at me
starts a conversation and we talk about
Japan and cherry blossoms love this end line, within it is a connection to the haiku and the japanese guy. it also closes the poem off well

thank you. 

i wanted to give a sort of movement , hence 'sitting'. i wonder if 'am sitting' would be better instead of 'was sitting'. i wanted to capture a simple moment from my life and close it off with a zen - ish feel. i hope it worked.

and yes, i am having issues with the formatting. hopefully i will figure it out soon.