Haiku 21.09.14
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(09-22-2014, 02:07 AM)Tamara Wrote:  or maybe


eclipsed
by a bat -
jupiter
Hi Tamara, I did think of using it the way that you've suggested and eventually decided for the way I used because of wanting to leave the last element to be discovered as a surprise, although I'm starting to prefer the way that you have suggested which does show the juxtaposition better.
Thanks,

Mark
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Haiku 21.09.14 - by Magpie - 09-22-2014, 01:51 AM
RE: Haiku 21.09.14 - by Tiger the Lion - 09-22-2014, 01:58 AM
RE: Haiku 21.09.14 - by Magpie - 09-23-2014, 06:42 AM
RE: Haiku 21.09.14 - by Tamara - 09-22-2014, 02:07 AM
RE: Haiku 21.09.14 - by Magpie - 09-23-2014, 06:44 AM
RE: Haiku 21.09.14 - by just mercedes - 09-22-2014, 04:39 AM
RE: Haiku 21.09.14 - by Magpie - 09-23-2014, 06:45 AM
RE: Haiku 21.09.14 - by ellajam - 09-22-2014, 09:24 PM
RE: Haiku 21.09.14 - by Magpie - 09-23-2014, 06:53 AM
RE: Haiku 21.09.14 - by billy - 09-23-2014, 02:45 AM
RE: Haiku 21.09.14 - by Magpie - 09-23-2014, 06:55 AM
RE: Haiku 21.09.14 - by Mwaba don - 09-23-2014, 03:07 AM
RE: Haiku 21.09.14 - by Magpie - 09-23-2014, 06:56 AM
RE: Haiku 21.09.14 - by rayheinrich - 09-23-2014, 05:26 AM
RE: Haiku 21.09.14 - by Magpie - 09-23-2014, 07:00 AM



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