The Key of Heart

[Mwaba don]

The Key Of Heart
Gazing at the keyboard
Then gaping at the screen
Heartbeats scribbling suggestions
At blank paper of mind, naive
Love, a word ringing around like
temple bells
This is what he spoke, didn't he?
Consciousness went dazed
A dreamlike modified reality
illuminated
After making it through a storm of
fear
Now it seemed good and clear
Fascination and long -suppressed
dreams
Flying around like colourful ribbons
Love demanding and daring arose
From hollows of despair and silent
urges
Young, forgetful heart lured into
what was
being called a bond
Breaking some old threads, wove new
fantasies
Eternal love and soulmates --
showering
delights felt so divine
Then trembling fingers danced on
the
keyboard
Three letters, making a yes
Wraped in the delusions that
everything said
was true and lasting
Commitment, a word she wrote on
her heart
Breathing in a dimension familiar
but new
Believing he will make all her dreams
come
true
Brush away her every deprivation,
heal her
every wound
With a blink of his eyes
Taking her to his colourful world,
where
season of romance never dies

The layout of your poem not good. the poem did not read well.
You talk of a lot of staff in the poem but some of it is not well explained
You have good metaphors. But metaphors mostly go well with good rhyming poems.
May spacing after four lines or three would have made the poem very interesting to read.
You picked a nice topic to talk about, love is always good to read.