09-15-2014, 06:20 PM
it's very hard to get a clear picture of whats going on. most of what's written has no reference to anything else. allow the reader to latch onto something solid. show us why, how, when, where, who with etc. build images. use poetic devices. move away from cliches like
Intoxicating, a fragrance
Sweet torment
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what is blood of dignity, who's dignity?
Intoxicating, a fragrance
Sweet torment
Moments shared
what is blood of dignity, who's dignity?