in general you're just telling us, the crocs, the leopards, the lions,
show us, use a little ambiguity (not too much) use simile and metaphor. assonance, alliteration etc are your friend.
glowing eyes police the muddy Nile.
lazy leopards patrol grassy knolls.
cheetahs sleekly race the verdant grassland
just one or two thoughts. it could be done a lot better with a little more thought .
show us, use a little ambiguity (not too much) use simile and metaphor. assonance, alliteration etc are your friend.
glowing eyes police the muddy Nile.
lazy leopards patrol grassy knolls.
cheetahs sleekly race the verdant grassland
just one or two thoughts. it could be done a lot better with a little more thought .