Of The Untitled

[Tiger the Lion]

Hey QDS. I most like that the rattling and growling became 'imperfect' recitals. It's pretty tight already but you might still have some room to cut. I will try to make some suggestions below.

I
tried to forget everything
I ever heard.
Each word.

Suddenly
I heard a strange murmur is "I heard" needed?
rattling around within,
without constraint.here I would prefer "unconstrained", Of course that would mess with the "within/without" idea - so maybe not.

The growl
terrified me momentarily-
The sudden lack ofI would attempt to replace "sudden" here as a form of it is already in play from S2.
something familiar.

Quickly
carefully constructed
blueprints of life becameyou may be able to replace "became" with punctuation.
imperfect recitals of thought left untitled.

Thanks for posting. -- On a side note -love the addition to your signature.