08-23-2014, 02:52 AM
I like the edit, it provides more of a contrast between the two playmates. It's also a beautiful image.
(08-21-2014, 08:01 AM)cjchaffin Wrote: edit #1:
In dream-like states where thoughts emerge
from unconscious whim, we carve stone
sculptures on opposite garden ends –
mine is a goat with webbed feet,
Carl’s is a duck with horns;
this is a meaningful coincidence.
Later, we play with our wise inner figures.
He dances on the grass, flinging yellow petals
while I sketch mandalas in green and gold sand.
original:
In dream-like states where thoughts emerge
from unconscious whim, we carve stone
sculptures on opposite garden ends –
mine is a goat with webbed feet,
Carl’s is a duck with horns;
this is a meaningful coincidence.
Later, we play in the sand
with our wise inner figures.
He dances while I draw hearts.
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