Playing with Jung

[ajcohen613]

In dream-like states where thoughts emerge
from unconscious whim, we carve stone woah. this is too much for me here. it seems like your trying to say something that could've been said a little more easily in a massively complicated way.. like a huge elephant picking up a single peanut if you catch my drift.
sculptures on opposite garden ends –

mine is a goat with webbed feet,
Carl’s is a duck with horns;
this is a meaningful coincidence. I feel like this line takes away from the reading experience; this coincidence is most likely already noted by the reader..no need to ruin the fun by stating it like this.

Later, we play in the sand
with our wise inner figures.
He dances while I draw hearts.

I know this is in the miscellaneous thread, but I left you a small critique out of habit. Hope you don't mind.