Wine Maidens

[Tiger the Lion]

Hi Chris, I really enjoyed this. If anything I would say that "I got it" in less than 6 stanzas. Even if I enjoy each equally, it feels like there is only room for 4 or 5.

Wine Maidens

I fervently await "fervently" made me think of ferment.
their superb autumn crush
and reap the fine harvest
of these inviting sprites.
My maidens of the vineyard
craft a piquant blush.

When their clothes are shed,
pulses quicken underbrush. very well crafted line IMO.
Thigh high in Pinot Noir, another great line - sexy, abrupt and dark - well done
they dance to my delight.
I find myself impassioned
by their autumn crush.

Mauve adorns their derrieres, I don't like the 2nd use of french here. Together with "adorns" - cheapens the poem for me
summoning a rush
of blood to my loins,
as they tread the pulp of light.
These ladies of the vine
compose a thrilling blush.

They glow in the sunlight,
effuse a rosy flush,
but their enthralling stomp
will march into the night.
I’ll readily consume
their viticulture’s crush.

On the grape-stained oak dance floor, This line seems a little long. I can't really see how to trim it. But I would if I could.
their breasts gently brush
as they press the rare juices,
their blithe gestures excite. I like that blithe excites.
My vineyard lasses decant
an enticing blush.

Their cellars are top-shelf, I'm on the fence about "top shelf" But it might depend on the exact mood you intended.
the inventory lush.
By way of their charm and craft,
my ardor ignites. I eagerly await
their superb autumn crush.
These maidens of the vine
create a tempting blush.

Hope some of that is helpful. Very enjoyable to read. Thanks for sharing,