08-18-2014, 06:44 PM
(08-18-2014, 11:41 AM)Tiger the Lion Wrote: We teetered and tottered;I like this, it's one of my life views well said. I don't think you need "and bravely"', I particularly like the sandbags, and have no problem with "fell", for me it didn't imply "fell off", just the drop. Thanks for posting it.
threw off sandbags to lift one another,
and bravely
fell to watch the other rise,
swearing to not jump off
if we ever hit bottom.
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