Waiting

[Wjames]

Thanks for reading and critiquing guys. Upon further thought, I think the title of this one is weak (it doesn't add anything to the poem), and I could definitely improve the layout of the second stanza (as Billy says). I also will probably add a fourth stanza (ending the third stanza at "bowl of water"), in order to give some lead-up to the final line.

I like "As it wasn't mine", but I'm not in love with it and if most other people think it's redundant, I'll consider cutting it.